When I saw the dates of when I started and when I last edited I cannot believe that I have left it that long.
Though it is like looking at the story through fresh eyes. One thing that I discovered about the story was the conflict of feelings. I know that the story is from a first person point of view and in the present tense. I was feeling like the story was in a past tense when reading it though. Thankfully it did not take me long to realize that the reason for this was that I had used a lot of words that are normally used when talking in a past tense.
I am now in the process of editing all of the past tense words. So far it is working much better and I have changed a lot.
I have also asked my friend who has written many things if he will look at the story and offer his opinion about what it is like and anything that I can do to improve it.
I am glad that I am starting to make progress again.
